Microfiction: Part I: Meet Kelsey
She bounces off the school bus, hair flying in the wind, legs shuffling up dirt behind her swirly body.
Kelsey is a 14-year-old athletic ball of energy who recently discovered she is adopted.
Her mother tried to tell her subtly for years, but Kelsey has always been enamored by fanfare and elaborate explanations. She searched for answers and found them.
As she skips down Tulane Dr., the sky smiles at her, the sun whistles, and cars honk their incessantly abusive horns.
She is heading home to nowhere, where no one is family.
A Cornered Gurl 
Powerful opening. The imagery of Kelsey’s physical energy juxtaposed with the stark reality of her emotional state is really striking and the contrast between the whimsical descriptions of the sun and sky and the “incessantly abusive horns” perfectly captures the internal turmoil she’s likely experiencing. The final sentence, “She is heading home to nowhere, where no one is family,” is heartbreaking. It’s a great setup for a story about identity and belonging.
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Thank you, Rhyan! I appreciate this feedback and you actually breaking down what’s really going down. It’s like you live in my head. Peace and blessings. 🙏🏾🩵
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My pleasure.
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A very interesting introduction to Kelsey. Can’t wait to see how this story and world is built around her. I’ll be keeping an eye on this one… 😊
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Peace, Nigel. Thank you.
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You’re welcome ☺️
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This reminds me of my cousin 🥲😔
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🙏🏾🩵 My Great-Aunt told my cousin she was adopted when we were in our 30s. At first, she didn’t take it well AT ALL, as one can imagine. But over time, she grew to understand her situation and accept it. *Shrugs* I always thought it was wrong for her not to know but we were FORBIDDEN to ever tell her; that it should come from her parents.
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That is crazy!! That’s a tough one and hard to say how I would feel. My cousin grew up knowing he was adopted but once he turned 18 he wanted to meet his real parents because he felt different than the rest of us.
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At least he always knew. I still cannot imagine the initial pain my cousin felt. I am certain it’s a tough situation to experience on both ends. But I feel like children who are adopted should know, and should be told at an age when they can clearly understand, and not when they’re full-blown adults. *Sighs*
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I agree Tre! I think I might feel betrayed.
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💯 EXACTLY!
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How accurate…”to where no one is family.”
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🙏🏾🩵
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Good start, I’m guessing there will be a continuation?
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Yes, this is “Part I” 🙂 And, thank you kindly.
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I enjoy engaging with and learning from your multilayered characters, author trE and look forward to reading more. 👏🏻
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Thank you kindly, Michele. I appreciate it! 🙏🏾🩵
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🤓 🙏🩵
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They can work together to make it family. I’ll be waiting to hear.
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I hope they do. *Crosses fingers* Thank you for reading.
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Good intro, I hope there is more!
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Yes! It’s the first installment. There will be more. Thank you!
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😔 that’s a sad tale
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It can be. It won’t be entirely too sad, though. 🙏🏾🩵
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Oh good 😊
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