The rain bears its harsh breath
Down on my weary knees
I cramp at the sound of your name
The pain seeps in, creeps like a villain
An opponent with too much to lose
And I search for a clear path
Away from your reflection
I wanted a moment to love you
A lifetime to get it right without
Being your everlasting enemy
But you bit into my hopes
Ripped the core from my growing
Mountain of wishes
And saddled me with unanswered questions
The sting of you tears at my brain
Reeking like burned popcorn
Stinking up my home
No matter what I do
You linger
Breaking every precious second
Stealing every ounce of joy
My demise, predestined, you are
The weaver of disgrace
And I am blunted in new form
Fearful of your next blow
burnt popcorn sucks, nice work here on this one Tre ❤
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Yes. Yes, it does. Thank you, Kim. Happy 4th ! ❤
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happy 4th to you too my friend. Will be in your neighborhood last week of July 🙂 just a stopover on the way to NY 🙂
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LOL. I’ll probably be at work. Now, I’m the workaholic again. LOL. But, I love it. As of right now, I wouldn’t trade it.
And, thank you! Jernee and I are enjoying this afternoon. I hope you guys are. ❤
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Stunningly poised words you place with fierce intensity. A haunting read well done.
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Hello, thank you. I truly appreciate the feedback.
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You’re welcome. 🙄
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Sumptuously dripping in intensity 💓
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Hey, you. Thank you. *big hugs*
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TrE, this is an example of the great beauty that can be born of great pain. I want to kneel before you when I read this, you are a master of expression. I feel the pain. I believe that writing this must have helped in getting through it. Wow, girl. Many kudos.
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Hey, Deb. Thank you! I appreciate your feedback. No kneeling, though. 💙
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Burnt popcorn is the absolute worst.
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Girl!!!
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I sink into the beauty of your work, the harsh truth delivered in gentle words, and sigh at it all. “The sting of you tears at my brain” – I love your deliberate use of the word “tears” in this line, the imagery is simply exquisite!
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Thank you, Tien. I appreciate this feedback. 😊
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Tien, you will like this. 6 word story challenge:
https://kirstwrites.wordpress.com/2018/07/07/sixwordstorychallenge-7th-july-2018/
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I just saw this…thanks! I’ll be sure to check it out!
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You’re most welcome. 🙂
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Just downloaded the app on my phone…still trying to figure it out…🤔😑😅
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Take your time. If you get a blog going here, please do let me know. You can email me if you like at acorneredgurl@gmail.com. It’d be great to see you in the 6 Word Story Challenges released every Saturday. I know how much you love those–about as much as I do, if not more. 🙂
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Well, I finally figured out the “following” function, so writing the six word story should be soon. 😁 Thanks for alerting me to this. You’re awesome, milady!
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Haha. Bit by bit, day by day. You’re most welcome, Tien. 😊
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This is so powerful! I love it.
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Thank you! I purchased your most recent book. It arrived yesterday. 😊
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Oh WOW, Thank You!!!! ❤️
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You’re most welcome. No problem. 😊
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This…
The sting of you tears at my brain
Reeking like burned popcorn
Stinking up my home
No matter what I do
You linger
Breaking every precious second
Stealing every ounce of joy
Truer words have never been spoken, Tre. Wonderful.
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Hey, you! Ms. Mountain Mover. Thank you!
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Picture and words❤️
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Hello, lovely. Thank you.
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I’ve become your fan now, girl. Excellent!
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Hey! Aww. Awesome. Thank you for stopping by. 😊
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If one sends you back this image of you, like if you are his adversary, it’s very likely you are your own..
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Ah. I like your take on it. Thank you for reading and responding.
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Always my pleasure 🤗
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